This is so useful! It’s very helpful. NIP: Umbral Heretic (being polished for submission), Umbral Heretic II (Working title), Novels I'm following: Dead Mountain - The Ladysmiths - Sparkie - Dreams of Fire and Snow - No Night -, "All literature builds worlds, but some genres are more honest about it than others." such an amazingly helpful post! But to be honest, I haven't read a work of fiction for a long time where there aren't some things that border on, or even are, cliches. Will be handy for me when I sit down to write next time. I’m pleased that this helps. Thank you! That's what I meant by "watch how you handle these". OMG! A quirked or single raised eyebrow=skepticism or amusement.

Here are some of the telltale signs of anger in a person’s expression: Their eyebrows would be lowered and pulled closer together Their eyelids would become squinted or raised (or their eyes may bulge if they are enraged) Show Don’t Tell – Free Course [cit]That's what I meant by "watch how you handle these". Ask yourself whether you can find a simple way to describe it, so that readers respond to it anew. Thank you so much. TIP: Use our Character Creation Kit to create great characters for your stories. i’m highly grateful to you, thanks a lot n million, may god bless you a long and happy life. Is it strange to say a color with “gaze”? Adverbs sometimes repeat information that’s already been given, such as ‘He leapt about excitedly’ or ‘She smiled happily’ – here the adverbs add nothing.

Just writing code until I have more time. We're taught to hate and fear cliches as writers, and there is some sense in that, but one reason that cliches are cliches is because they do sum things up pretty tidily (hmmm summing things up tidily--cliche?) “Unfortunately,” (pause, lips pursed indicating deliberation and thought) “these are almost” (stress on final word, downward tilt of the head with slight inclination to the left as the speaker maintains gaze on listener indicating mock-serious intent) “entirely” (extra stress on this word, head lifts and turns full-on indicating intent) “cliché” (jaw firms, slight downward shift of the brow, eyes narrow indicating mild annoyance.) None of those are meant to be"never do" rules - they're "watch how you handle these because they're often overused" guidelines. They are handy at narrowing down what cues certaing things, but it can still be hard to reduce it to a few words.

When you are completing your character biographies, be sure to include how your main characters move and talk. Richer than our word, it means divine play, the play of creation, destruction, and re-creaction, the folding and unfolding of the cosmos. My first thought was that she was seeing smog! We’re glad you find this useful. For instance, if you write ‘His mother had died recently’, it may be because you can’t be bothered to think exactly when his mother had died. And speaking of the word cliche--is it or isn't it supposed to have an accent over the e? ...DESCRIPTIVE WRITING DESCRIPTIVE WRITING is the clear description of people, places, objects, or events using appropriate details. You can usually replace an adverb and verb with a stronger verb, such as ‘dashed’ for ‘ran quickly’ or ‘crawled’ for ‘moved slowly’. ; ) Thank you! In any case, I agree that it wouldn't be necessary to show everything, and I think Kukana's expression of 'shooting a worried glance' works just fine. As you mentioned, eyes wide open already means more than one thing for you. I impressed to read it. My December Challenge Entry - MAKE THEM SEE A mullion trillion thanks for this incredibly useful page of “show” instead of telling. Random Writing Rants. There is an old Sanskrit word, lîla, which means play. Adjectives (words that qualify a noun) can be useful, but are often overused. hi! or "A dragon sprawled at the end of the lane, gnoshing on a minivan the way a puppy might chew on a shoe.".

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She may treat others with kindness or indifference.



Use these combinations as needed.’. You're describing how things look from the POV of your character, not telling the reader what is going on "John was concerned about Jane's distress". And sometimes in the middle of writing, when we’re trying to find the words to describe an angry expression or a sad expression, we draw a blank. We could be sitting, standing, or walking. They have places on the web where they have pictures of people experiencing different emotions (often related to psychology research). Now that I've been writing and critiquing, I sort of snicker at those scenes where a writer feels the need to describe the physical attributes of the pov character, for instance, in a situation where he or she would not likely be thinking about them (or to artifically make the opening scene in a story take place in a dressing room with a convenient mirror nearby). ‘Even when they don’t express their thoughts verbally, most people constantly throw off clues to what they’re thinking and feeling. Peesh avoided his gaze, starting as her eyes fell on the flakes of leather that covered her hands... Spire City serial fiction, Season One: Infected, Season Two: Pursued, and Season Three: Unwoven--complete and available in a book-length bundles (print and electronic), along with the novelette "The Spire Singers" and the novella The Patterns of Cloth and Dreams. or better yet, "A dragon loomed at the end of the lane."

For example, he or she may be shocked and angry, or shocked and happy. Yes, Ayan. Very carefully, I'd suggest. I need something different for pleading. But using the same "stock" descriptions of facial expressions can get repetitive as well, and sometimes spicing things up with a brief but more concrete observation can help draw a reader into a scene. When you describe something, try to think of it freshly, as if you’ve never come across it before. Her prejudices, fears, and beliefs will also affect the way she treats others. This is great. Avoid all adverbs used to describe dialogue – ‘he said angrily’, or ‘she said nervously’. I remember once using an image I was guiltily thinking might be a little cliche one time and a reader actually asking me what the cliche meant. Adverbs are words that modify a verb; they usually end with ‘ly’. For instance, if newspapers still used that sort of technology, they'd have stereotypes for phrases like President Obama, the Olympicsor financial catastrophe. It makes us aware of the use of each movement as a symbol of inner thought. But I believe we can always be a little more creative in mixing them up to denote various degrees and subtleties in an emotion. Except when we don't.